Viability: It's a demo so not fully done yet, but the overall story is clear and well done so far.
Presentation: I like the use of timed text, It is also clear and understandable.
Theme: I love this story so far. I like the idea of trying to get out of being drafted and all the little details poured in. The text is well written for this idea and just works very well with it. Good job.
Engagement: I have enough options to be myself and play this out how I would. That adds quite a bit to the immersion. Good job!