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Wanted to collect some feedback from my initial read-through of the book:

  • The Greeblin creation options (pg. 6) are sparse at the moment. I'm assuming the plan is to create more as the game funds, but only having 3 options for each section feels light. I would also love to see 6 options in each section so I can just roll it and move on quickly. 
  • The Before Starting section (pg. 9) feels like it's in the same vein as the other Greeblin creation topics. I'd love to see a premade/rollable list of reasons to leave included too, especially in the spirit of quick character creation. 
  • For the game terms (mostly pg. 10), I was confused about "journal" and "chronicle". I thought "journal" was the whole thing I was writing, "chronicles" were large subsections, and then "sections" were the actual entries. I'm still not 100%, but I think "journal" and "chronicle" are interchangeable, or at least "journal" is used to describe the action of writing in the physical artifact that is the "chronicle". I also think calling them "entries" instead of "sections" would help, as "entry" feels more intuitive to me. I think of "sections" as parts of the rules I'm reading. 
  • I like the Passage of Time section (pg. 13), especially as I think of trying to randomize as much of my game as possible. I could see listing an optional 3rd six-sided die in the setup in case players wanted to roll all 3 for each entry: impetus, topic, and time.
  • In the Pond sections (pgs. 14 & 15), it says "Whenever an item from the [...] Die list is rolled, it is replaced by one picked by the player...". Is this supposed to say whenever an item is rolled "that the player doesn't like or doesn't want to interact with" then pick one of these? Or is this talking about if I roll a repeated entry that I should pick one from below? The former seems like it's connected to the safety info on page 3. The latter here seems like an interesting way to keep things fresh throughout my chronicle. 

I don't think I'm confused by the rules, or at the very least I feel like I can play some version of this game successfully. I'll be doing my actual playthrough later today; parental duties are calling me at the moment. Very much looking forward to meeting my first Greeblin!