I enjoyed how in this story the portrait both to antagonizes Dorian by displaying to him an idealized version of himself that he can never live up to, and that he can never live up, while also encouraging him to pursue his true desires in life. You also did a good job showing just how much Dorian was starting to crumble under of the expectations demanded of him while he struggles to find any sort of joy from his mundane routines.
The only feedback I have is that Sir Henry's foreboding that Dorian's actions will eventually have consequences only sort-of applies here. In this version of Dorian Gray, the painting seems to have a mind of it's own and is an extension of Basil's own desire to mold Dorian into a man he wants. In this case, how much autonomy does Dorian really have? Especially if restraint from acting on his worse impulses could lead to punishment?
Keep up the good work!
My final parting words is to change the keysmash text to 'You have been diagnosed with Gay'.
-Christine