Post by Jorge de Burgos in Harem Hotel (18+) comments

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Been trying this, and found interesting writing as far as norpo (+18) visual novels go. Good for tragic pasts not involving some kind of sexual abuse, which would have been the easiest path. Ashley's and Maria's come to mind.

Very disappointed with Lin's though. It only goes the way of making her the perfect slave slut. Was expecting something about her eventual manumissio and the struggles of pioneering it in a society where her race is enslaved. After the "slaver contest challenge" came up, I stopped caring about her arc and focused on the rest.

Anyway, commendable work.

Shethek3 years ago (1 edit) (+1)

You and me both are thinking in a very similar way. I would really like Lins story to be able to avoid that thing but it is kinda entwined to the whole storyline overall unfortunitly.

Jorge de Burgos3 years ago (1 edit) (+1)

Ruined the whole thing for me. Leaves you with a taste of "something is wrong", even whilst digging through the other stories. Could have had an alternate arc related with Autumn, for example, in order to build the Sanctuary.

Shethek3 years ago(+1)

Agreed, it almost did ruin it for me but the Ashley arc resonated too much with me to just stop playing.

I wonder how much money i would have to dump on Runeys head to make an alternative choices to avoid this whole thing with the guy in town where it all started (seriously we had such a great time with Lin until he showed up and ruined all of it...), oh and while at it let me take Moon to the damn backroom when we do stuff in the bar...

RuneyGames3 years ago(+2)

Something is wrong, slavery. You were disgusted by what they did, and rightly so. In this event, you played by his rules to prove to him that loving your elf is the way to go. He's a very powerful person so any chance you get to influence him is obviously a great idea, and this is Lin's goal the whole time. Win the competition, prove to the world elves are to be loved. Lin goes on to fight for her freedom while you help her as much as possible.

RuneyGames3 years ago (2 edits) (+2)

Please read my other comment. I recommend playing through the whole event, and maybe even the rest of her story before presuming what it is about. I'm really just not quite sure how one could get "Lin's story is treating her like a sex doll" with everything going on in her story.

RuneyGames3 years ago (6 edits) (+3)

Lin's story definitely is NOT all about making her the perfect slave slut. You may not have given her story enough attention. Quite a lot of it involves treating her like an equal, and the structure, economy, and politics of elvish slavery. The biggest overarching theme of Lin's story is, in fact, liberation. What you were doing in the dungeon with Cornwall (a situation you begrudgingly agree to), was try to prove to him that loving an elf and treating them like an equal is the way to go. And if you win, you do exactly that. What you were expecting is what her story is about, please continue playing.

Cornwall, the man you met in the city and who introduced you to how people abuse their slaves is meant to be one of the biggest antagonists in the game. Slight spoiler, but you steal his elves and have the option to give them as much freedom as this society allows while still fighting for elvish liberation alongside Lin.

Shethek3 years ago(+1)

I get all that, but still it pains me to go through it all. I feel very protective over Lin (ok i am starting to sound like a psycho but i got really invested in this game :P) and all of that arc made me actualy angry.

I get what You wrere doing and You did a great job, the story is great but it still something that made my Blood Boil (in a wrong way).

Again, do not get me wrong, i love the game but i do have my complaints that is all.

RuneyGames3 years ago (5 edits) (+1)

I understand, I don't expect everyone to love every event. But it's something she wants to do as well, and of course she isn't in danger during this event. I believe the reader should understand what the world they're changing, why they're changing it, and have motivation to change that world. Changing the world isn't all flowers and sunshine after all.

They're meant to be antagonists, and they're meant to evoke an emotional response out of you, otherwise they wouldn't be good characters.

Shethek3 years ago(+2)

Honestly my emotional response in that event was because of my lack of ability to protect Lin but i get what You mean and belive me i think it is not written badly or anything. I just wish for a way to avoid not being able to protect her.

Still, this is Your game, I am in no way trying to impose on that. You do Your thing.

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