This was epic! Really cool story, and well written. Story felt rich and filled with mystery. Loved the poetic tone. Nice one!
Cool to see a locally inspired story. Could really feel the main character, and imagine the other characters.
Like how exploring around affects the story.
Also had a very polished look and feel. Awesome to see how much you got out of Twine!
Some critical points:
Would maybe break some of the sections into more scenes to keep player interactivity going. It sometimes felt a bit intimidating to be faced with a large wall of text all of a sudden.
Also, it was a bit hard to "follow" - if you catch my drift haha?
Really enjoyed this :)