Well I pick it up because I'm wondering how someone first Visual Novel/Indie Game will look like, but to my surprise it's actually pretty good. You can feel the specialty of each character which makes them unique (although it is still a premature judgment due to the short duration of the VN currently is, it's still on volume one), but of course it's an oc you develop for a long time. The art looks nice and cute, colorful but not that excessive, you played it good by emphasis what excessive in their world is by showing Zelly fashion design or the concept of Dinosaur as something from myth, separating from what the Dream Elf consider normal.
Something that I think could be improved is probably the background scene, as I don't really think it blends it quite well with the Dream elves, but as the protagonist say, I do not impose this. The writing of the protagonist can also be improved as sometimes it is hard to differentiate between the thought of the protagonist and the word the protagonist actually says, but once again, I do not impose this.
What really needs to be improved is the music. The music were the same for almost the whole part of the game, making all the changes of scenery and situation feels a little bit bland.
I think that's all that I can note, can't wait for Volume II of this Visual Novel. Good job at making this visual novel.