Oh man, wasn't expecting someone to upload their playthrough this early in development. Hope you had a decent time testing it out with your friends!
Are some scenes really too stretched out? Personally, I've always liked novels that contain extra details although I do understand where you're coming from so I'll keep that in mind!
My writing could use some work but I'll see what I can do. ^^
Regardless,thanks for spending your time testing the Demo and for creating that video. I've learned a couple of things to keep in mind for further developments that I might not be able to get otherwise.
Cheers,
-D