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This is honestly the most fun game among those I am given to review. congrats!

At first, I found it dumb I got a pdf file and not an actual game. But as I read it, I got glued and followed each and every instructions. For page 14, I literally took a break and did something else before coming back! this happened 3 times! Actually more than that but I gave up and took the 1 die. I can't wait 14 min... or 14 days!!!

Now let me give some feedback and it has to do something with chances. You probably know this, with one die, all chances are equal, with two dies, getting 7 has the highest probability. 3 dies is 10 and 11. 4 dies is 14. Knowing this, these pages will be the most frequently visited. pages 19 onward is hard to get by. Speaking of 19, I don't really understand the first paragraph. regardless, I feel like I should be looking at the top part of the die unless stated otherwise. 

I reached page 11 multiple times but never went to page 25 through that page. It just didn't feel right. I also went to page 11 pretty early (the probability of getting 11 is high as I mentioned)

I've played Adventure books before and the two things I wanted to do were: get to the good ending, traverse every single path. Given the probabilities of the dies, some pages are just near impossible to reach. And I wanted to reach all of them. I ended up cheating and reading pages 20, 22, 23 and 24. Yes I did manage to reach 21, that was my highest roll.

You don't know how long I've played this game. quite long really.

Your verbose game has prompt me to be very verbose as well. But to cut things straight, what I suggest is to balance the pages better so that the higher pages are easier to reach. It requires a bit of math with the probabilities. Also, for the common pages, make something happen. pages 7 does nothing. Page 14 does but that's just evil (if the player is like me who actually abides by the rules). It's a nice addition but it's a common page so chances of landing there is very high.

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Thank you for the in-depth review! I will definitely take your notes about probability under advisement as I work on the next game (here's a sneak peek: you will read words and roll dice).

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