Hi developer! You made a good story here, I enjoy playing it very much.
Disclaimer: I'm a rando internet guy, so take this as you want to take it because you know, rando internet guy... who am I to give you some advice, ain't it? But I really feel that an attention to a couple details here and there to the style would raise the quality, already well over average, of the script. It's a nitpick, a quirk of your style of writing that appears here and there some time. Let me explain if you want to humor me. You are totally welcome to just "fock off!" me and stop reading here xD if so I would end with: great job :D I like it! Keep making more of this.
It's just 2 points.
Point number one: you write very often in your script as "thing slash other thing". Yeh, no, don't do that... It cuts the reading, it literally slashes it, and there are ways to say what you want to say better. For example, by making an adverb from an adjective, and a "confused slash quirky remark" can become a "confusingly quirky remark". Or, better choice, would be to use one word only that describes both! For example a "confused slash quirky remark" can be expressed as:
-esoteric
-ermetic
-eccentric
-bizarre
-perplexing
just to name a few, more can be found contextually. Or, for example, instead of writing "laboratory slash workshop", you could use one word only that already exists and merge the two, like R&DLab (research&development), or workroom. This would help fluent reading A LOT! The "thing slash other thing" reminds you that you are reading, it breaks some kind of spell cast on you when engaged that makes you forget that... I don't know if it's only me... but it would help, and weaves in perfectly with what is my
Point 2: there's fat there in the script that could easily be cut off without consequences but having a leaner narrative. That meaning, after reading ALL your novel I think I've read row over row over row of text in between scenes, most of it useless "got this got there did that". It seems you are adamant on the fact that if the script doesn't explicitly contain the exact order of bathroom morning routine every day it isn't really engaging the reader and it's a failure of storytelling on the like of a plothole. Instead, it just means you force your reader to go through useless padding that contains no narrative value. My advice there would be: while not on dialogue, focus on the efficency of the text, chisel the concept you want to transmit with less words possible, imply what is mundane and, more important of all, cut out mercilessly. I know, it's your "baby" and you don't want to cut it, but sometime it's necessary for it's health. This will not only gain quality for the script, but will also respect the time of the reader at the same time: win slash win!
But I repeat, I'm just a rando internet guy, could be you'll be better by just ignoring me xD
Have a good day sir.