this is a blast!! full of energy from the get. the wain art was a great choice. i like the light touch of real-world-thrift-store-find aesthetics - really elevates this. landing on DRIVE as the WIL replacement was kinda crazy, it actually fits well lmao. so much fun, easily gameable detail, especially in the encounter table. you brought the heat with this.
a few minor thoughts:
- beleth seems like a really shitty road trip buddy. i think you should have made her shittier
- would've liked a better consequence for failure on the DRIVE save in area 2. one of the few areas i think you could have gone Bigger here. as-is, i'd probably play that as having beleth get mad and pushy if you try the save again.
- it's crazy to me that you leave the cat cultists driving a little car up to random chance!! give them all little cars dude come on. also, gut feeling, but 12 STR feels a touch high flavor-wise. i might have made that DEX instead, since they're cats lol
- i was gonna say i respect your game for shouting out Astral Tourists, then saw that you made it. so, i still respect your game, but in a different way!
- is there a reason the header text on Beleth's Sanctum isn't fully colored?
high: hard to pick between the cloud giant plagued by Protestant Work Ethic and the knight bluffing about being able to detect evil. they're character-full situations that spring right off the page and feel super easy to play.
low: this is splitting hairs, but i'm kiiinda against the sanctum dungeon. when i read this module, it's the road trip that compels me the most - smoking cigs, talking shit with Beleth, sitting on the hood joking about being "bone cursed", all those ideas grab me and pull me in. the setup with the sanctum being attacked is a fun situation, and there's a lot of good stuff there, but it doesn't feel like the star of the show to me. in the confines of the jam, i would've loved to see a much larger pointcrawl with a shrunken-down description of this fight at the end.
(really what i'm saying is that you should have both cakes and write an expanded edition after voting ends 😉)
in-between: you used "stats as Bear" so many times i thought for sure you were doing a bit, but the brotherhood of giants break that pattern. if you were doing a bit, i think you're a coward for not giving the giants bear stats too 😌
overall: this fucks. great work! 🚗