It is our belief, as writers, that you should be able to hook your audience with your very first line. And the moment we started playing, both of us were immediately drawn to your story. Your assets are incredible, and the art is beautiful! I'm a huge fan of the battle system you've inplimented as well-- very original. If you ever get a chance to turn this into a full fledged game, I think you should jump on the opportunity. You've obviously got the talent for it.
The only small critique that I had pertained to your battle system. Rolling a 5 didn't seem to really give you anything good, which is only just one short of 6. I would probably (personally) have it be a tad bit more rewarding, considering your chances of getting a 5 are one in six. It being completely RNG, you're never guaranteed to roll very well even as you upgrade your skills. That's really the only thing!
Wonderful job~
(On a personal note, could you tell me how to pronounce all the names? Some of them were harder for us to figure out than others. I'd love to honour your universe!)