The story was good, just thought it needed to be a bit longer. Expanded. Staple more rocks to the mountain. The presentation is average; scaling a mountain, and barely looking out over the vastness of the land? Disappointing.
Iseldur looks like he's going to scream, but he doesn't. It would've made some sense im just sayin...
The folklore theming is strong, but the writing is very loose with how it tells, switching pov often, in an odd order.
Hope to see you again for another jam!