nobody paying to uncensor shit lmao
Okay, I tried your game VN. As long as there is no place to write to you directly, I'll write my review here.
Firstly, I think it has potential. It's just version 0.2, and you still have a long way to go.
Suggestions:
- Add some colors to the names. When a character speaks, it's easier to look at the name color than read the name every time.
- For the narrator (Mentality), you could make the text italics so we could immediately know no characters are speaking.
Bugs:
Ren'Py handles everything, and you don't have complex mechanics that would have some bugs. But, at the end of the first sex scene, the image before the animation reappears and quickly disappears. It's not smooth and could be easily fixed.
During the last scene of Molly, we have the last screen "Full on Patreon" but we can still continue the story and meet Sally. I don’t know if it’s intentional, but it’s important to notice.
Review:
The rhythm is somehow random. Sometimes, the story is detailed, and everything takes its time to set up. But at other times, the story moves too fast, without putting anything in place, and goes on important events as if it weren’t.
Take your time to write the story. Take your time to introduce the characters. Who is Molly? Why is she a perfect stranger to Kirill at the train station, but randomly copulates the same night and enters into a relationship with him the next day? Kirill is married and has cheated on his wife before learning that she cheated on him, so his reaction is not correct.
About Sally, the character is interesting. A girl who knows everything about Kirill and wants to help him with something. We don't know anything about her, but it can be a good thing if well implemented.
Koikatsu is still a good way to have good chara-design quickly. Continue with it.
Conclusion:
Keep going. Take your time, don't push yourself too much and don't rush. It's a VN, the story is the most important part of the game.
I will come back when the project has made a bit more progress.