This is an alright introduction to a larger story. Apparently this was done in 7 days, which is impressive. The premise of the story is pretty neat. I did find the whole "OMG a talking dog!" And "What's a hue-min?" Back and forth pretty cliche and annoying, but that's about it in terms of gripes, other than the grammatical issues mentioned by other people. There's not much to say since it's only an introduction. I'll be interested in seeing how it develops in the future, but right now, it's just a fine VN.