a tri-fold pulp comic pastiche is such a choice approach for a fist mission (though i'm stuck with letter size, unfortunately). beautiful illustrations! the scenario feels classic and the details are evocative, though it gets a little dense on the layout for the second page. i like the threat table and the various ways things can turn, and pulling the twist out into an optional module is a smart move. that said, i think you could use a proofreading pass here, and i feel like it could run really, really fast at the table, but i do like missions that leave room for PCs to talk to randos and make bad decisions. i think this would be great fun for the noir lovers.