Hm hm hmmm, I quite enjoyed this. Just at the front I know some people might be put off from the loosey goosey pronouns used for Ren, but I'm willing to take it as "oh he's a he/they type baddy" which considering their character... well I appreciate it. This pace is pretty fragmented and fast, but I think it works. The music choices are not what I would have made, but I think that they actually lend themselves well to helping with the sort of surreal nature of the game.
I do have plenty of questions, how is Ren locating their targets, why the hell is a CEO walking to work, they're a compulsive liar and manipulator, so just how much of what they like in Lucan is the truth, etc.. I didn't "fall" for the trap with Ren, so when Tom appeared I wasn't too surprised, but I think that's more to the strength of the writing, giving the feeling of something being off, not just a manic pixie dream girl encounter, but something with an undercurrent of menace. Maybe because Lucan is so naive, or maybe because Ren has these small moments of menace that slip through the cracks, or their statement about lying. I'm curious where the story will go. Part of me hopes Ren's blackmail plan would fail simply because Lucan's family doesn't care enough now that he's served enough of his purpose, but that's my own little crack theory. Where this toxic yaoi goes next, I hope if you haven't started making part 2 already, you do now! I think it's a strong first showing, I absolutely love both the sprite art and the CGs, especially the close ups in the alley, and I can't wait for the rest!