That story sucked.
No, not “It’s You Again and Again”, this one was great! It starts a bit slow, and when we met Gabriel, I was a bit anxious about how this would continue, but the story started really going from there. Both main characters are pretty great. The writing is mostly good, but there were a few grammatical errors, missing or repeated words etc. And of course, the premise itself is fun and interesting!
The folklore theme is pretty light, El mentions liking myths and legends and tells one early on (with great presentation and flair!) that gets called back on later. Speaking of, the presentation is pretty good. The sprites look really nice and have lots of variations. The backgrounds have a distinctive style that’s pretty fun. The music is pretty nice too.
Overall, I am smitten. I kind of want to see what else our huge planeswalker get up to.^^ Great job!