Finally got to read something from Blu, and the first impression really is: he do be yapping.^^ The second impression is that is really damn good. The third is that it’s crazy you’ve done all this in a month.
You’re brushing the word limit with no choices at all; so it’s quite a long story by jam standards, and you use it well. The narrative evolves nicely, and after a bit of an overwhelming opening, we get some nice characters to meet. There are a few moments that felt could have been cut down a bit (the butterfly moments, some of the DnD parts, the final scene) but they still felt really nice to read.
The presentation was pretty awesome. There aren’t any dull moments, always some fun animations or nice backgrounds/CGs to look at. A few moments are in the black but the amount of backgrounds already in the game is impressive already. And the gobelins are awesome. The music and sound effects are more standard but work well.
The folklore theme is represented by the DnD adventures being based on Arthurian legends, which is pretty fun. The real life stuff doesn’t have much folklore though, unless the butterfly effect counts..? Speaking of, I don’t really like the butterfly effect metaphor in this: the effects of Tyler’s actions are not really out of left field or particularly chaotic…
Overall, a pretty great VN! There are some flaws but the overall package is quite excellent. Although, you’re getting too much positive attention, so I’m afraid I have to remove 2 stars from all your ratings.