Despite being a short story, you've given it a suitable cliffhanger to make us wonder what awaits the guys in the next update.
Besides creating a suitable atmosphere in the scenarios, the only thing you could improve would be the music.
I think I only heard one or two tracks that were in the game, which can get a bit annoying due to its repetitiveness in certain moment.
Good luck with your new project, GrCat!
Don't leave it paused for too long, okay? :(