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Yes, the edits were definitely fat trimming more than anything, I know it was a 30k removal but that’s still significant.

The slashes around the please were supposed to be two so it turns into italics, so I’ll fix that soon. The ‘recalibrate’ has received a partial edit but at 400k, I’ve got to take it section by section (I’m also working on the ‘rather than’ thing because I’ve used that about 900 times in a 400k chapter and that is just too much, same for the word ‘settle’ - I’ve done up to Anwar’s scene and no further), I’ll fix the Mattie intro when I do the please, and I’ll have a look at the scene that’s similar to Scarlette’s to see if I feel right changing it.

Thank you so much for this!

You're very welcome!

And - fair enough re: 'rather than' + 'settle'. Keep in mind, though - out of those 400K words, unless you have them back-to-back, right after each other, I'm not really noticing it. Sometimes: you just gotta use the word you wanna use. Not saying you shouldn't look to trim if you can, but it's also easy to get kinda - obsessed over it and then you're missing forest for trees.
TL;DR: You're doing Great, sweetie 😂