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I think you might also get away with just adding something about the machine priest imagining physical reactions and movements from the brain - that could lean into what they feel about this procedure as it is done to Ceron.

Your proposed changes make sense and would most likely do the trick and I don't think a big change would do the story any good anyway. It is already good, just needs its edges sanded so to speak ^^

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Okay!! I’ll work on a new draft with this revision. Thanks a lot for your feedback!

You are welcome, glad I could help.