I'm passionate about stars, celestial navigation, astrobiology and all that. Thank you for this game!
The story has nothing to do with the theme of the jam "harvest" whatsoever.
It's good that you added validation of the player's input for the name (defaults to Alice).
Dawn says northeast but the arrows are four directions, not eight. It can be confusing which direction to go first.
I did count a few times where the player is presented with choices which are just an illusion: 1) rest or head for the summit, 2) follow the map or not, 3) follow Dawn or leave the forest. That is disappointing! It's more respectable to guide the player instead of present such "choices". Maybe 2 was funny in the way "Please" is added to the text. But overall you should avoid this technique.
"It's not like I would miss the chance to get rich" <== maybe the player has another motivation to search. It's better to ask what the player desires (as free text input or as a list of a few options) OR just default to "practice my new navigation skills".
The words waxing and waning should be quoted, not their translations.
A lot of language errors:
The weather's today perfect <== The weather's perfect today
an seasonsed mountaineer <== a seasoned
won't get lost too <== lost either
before get going <== before we get going
go to an adventure like this <== go on an adventure
we could've missed the change <== would've
have one in minde <== in mind
life in other planets possible <== on other planets
impossible in it <== on it
the times becomes <== the times become
I hoped your learned something new <== I hope you learned
What does even happen <== What even happened? or What did just happen?
fell near us and cause an explosion <== caused an explosion
we're just caught by <== we were caught by
that did not really help our situation <== does not really
now points at west <== points to the west
learned it on you own <== your own
Orion is an is an <== repetition
And because of that it takes a follows a wide arc <== same wording immediately after each other
it's already heading going down the west <== similar wording immediately after each other
On the other hand Big Dipper <== on the other hand should be used after on the one hand. It's more suitable to use "whereas" or an alternative
can be called as the <== called the
have you watched meteor shower <== a meteor shower
I know perfect spot <== the perfect spot
with an onobstructed view <== unobstructed
we've just arrive at <== we've just arrived
the perfect time where <== time when
shower it's at it's peak <== shower is at its peak
all of a sudden it always gets <== it usually gets
is clear as day <== is as clear as day
here should fine <== should be
never failed to impress me <== never fail to impress
countless of times <== countless times
Have you make your wish? <== Have you made your wish?
I've doze off <== I've dozed off
putting your faith onto something <== faith in something
I've wished for both of us in all the shooting starts <== for both of us with each shooting star
I didn't forgot <== didn't forget
get you out of here from this forest <== repetition
now we're at this place
go straight foward from here <== straight ahead
what is it that why you can't <== what is it that you can't OR why is it that you can't
I miss seeing trace of <== the trace of
what's this a poster? <== this - a poster? OR what's this poster?
Good luck!