This is very cool. At first, I was not very enthusiastic, but the more I read, the more I see the chaos this scenario will sow amongst my players.
I'd recommend giving it a little more time in the oven and tidying up the art and the spelling/grammar/editing, but it's pretty close. As is, it reads and looks like a rough final draft.
That being said, this is cool and very Mothership. I'm excited to run this one!