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Obviously, I wasn't transparent enough in my writing with Chapter 1. I am re-writing the first chapter which I may release prior to the next chapter. I'll confirm that soon. 

I've been re-writing chapter 1 because people don't get to the stage where Livvy's situation is all a lie which is revealed in chapter two and why she says what she says to deceive the MC and upset him. Livvy was never meant to be an LI just a friend with benefits, but people like her and wanted her to be an LI so now she is a side LI if people choose. In the re-write things will be much clearer.

Rebecca isn't an LI at all. They are just two people having a one off fling. She doesn't need the MCs approval for her thoughts. They are best friends who talk to each other about everything even stuff they don't want to hear. The rewrite changes those lines anyway. Instead the new text makes it clear Rebecca has a negative view of Rebeus.

Charlie likes to watch and listen. She is a voyeur. The object of her fantasy is always the MC, she never thinks about other men. That wasn't clear, but I have made it clear in the re-write.

Tauriel kept the MC at arms length and there is a reason for that that comes later. Still, I have re-written parts so it is apparent there is more going on there. It wasn't clear enough before.

Jacinta is only interested in using the MC. She has no romantic interest in him. That comes later.

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You say Livvy can be a side LI? Hmmm I guess I messed up somewhere with her then. I chose to bring her with me to the East, and then told her I wanted to keep the relationship going, but she dumps you anyways. I found it weird that she'd do that, now that she's finally rid of Rebeus and that you're not travelling as much. Kind of messed up actually, it makes it seem like she was only with you because of Rebeus.

Btw thanks for the response and not getting defensive. I appreciate that u seem to listen to feedback. I'll be honest, i'm sticking with the game mainly because I like the story. I don't really like the main LI's. For starters, many of the random side girls are WAY more attractive than them. And shit, one of them is a really old Woman and a massive hoe who would literally partake in orgies. No offense, but that's not main LI material lol. She has a heart to heart with the MC, and goes on to describe her disgusting sex life in detail. It just doesn't make much sense to add these details unless you have some sort of NTR or cuck fetish......

I DO like the game overall, I just wish we didn't have to hear every LI's entire sexual history every single time we talk to them

When I started creating the game , Gen 9 was new. I decided to go with Gen 9 models and they were limited. I had about six, now I have a hundred so I have a lot more to choose from. In saying that, I think Lydia is the most beautiful girl in the game. I think Jacinta is gorgeous. So a lot with LIs comes back to personal preference. Sarissa is an ugly duckling who changes with the game and Charlie has a lot of change coming physically and emotionally, so see how she ends up and what you think. I love the different Charlie coming, I think that version of her is hot, but time will tell. There are a lot more girls to come so you may find some more interesting. I think there is 7 or 8 in the new chapter.

I always appreciate constructive feedback. You said what you don't like and why. I can work with that and discuss it and if I agree I am prepared to make changes. I've got a lot of angst about Livvy so I'm prepared to adjust her story to a point. Livvy's path is the longest side path in the game. She has a lot to go through especially in the later stages of the game. There is some leeway in her path I'm prepared to adjust, hence why I'm adjusting the first chapter. 

NTR, Cuck, harem, swinging, and so on doesn't worry me. I've never been hung on up putting games in boxes like so many other people. I think it severely limits creativity. If a game has a story I find interesting I don't care what it is. That is just my preference though. I do seem to prefer harem style games though, but there are NTR games I like too. 

It's been an interesting conversation. Thanks for posting.

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Ahh that makes sense, I was wondering if you simply were limited with character design in the beginning. I will admit Lydia was the ONE main LI I found attractive, and yeah Sarissa's improvement was huge, good job with her upgrade.