Great narration in this track. The development tells the story beautifully. The melody at the guitar is great too. The modulation was a good idea, even if it was somewhat clumsy it did create a memorable shift in tone.
The main drawback of your track is definitely the mix, the guitar was pretty loud and the drums did sound strange, though I'm having trouble figuring out exactly while.
Melody clarity 5/5
Melody Impact 5/5
Composition 3/5 (track is good overall, but the modulation is really clumsy towards the end. Also the chord at 2:23 sounded really out of place)
Listenability 3/5
Correlation to theme 4/5