Great submission, sounds very cinematic and I love it. The composition is rather straightfoirward but it does make it super efficient, and it's really immersive.
One thing I'd like to point out is that there is very little of the melody. I usually encourage scarce use of the melody, because I think the buildup to the motif is also part of what makes it good, but here I don't feel as rewarded, as the melody stops before it can develop all the way, which is a shame because I really was digging it.
Melody clarity 4/5 (The use of the diminished second does sound weird sometimes)
Melody impact 3/5
Composition 4/5
Listenability 5/5
Correlation to theme 3/5 (Would've loved a more elaborate description or worldbuilding)