This is a pretty massive project, with at least 3 core sections I can identify! Loving the melody and the choice to put it on electric guitars so much. My problem: I waited 3 whole minutes to receive any inkling of it. I wish the final conclusion was at least somewhat foreshadowed, because I was waiting on any semblance of 'main melody' the whole time. I think 'cohesion' would be a good way to sum up what I want to say - the 3 sections are very cool but don't feel that closely related. As for the sections: I found the first one very overwhelming in terms of elements (rhythmic composition, plethora of instruments and sounds) and difficult to grasp the structure of. I love the third section's melody, but the loose drums/percussion feel a bit strange to me.
Aside from those opinions - the vocals are so cool!! A lot of awesome sounds and ideas, and the eventual melody is composed, performed, and mixed like perfection. I applaud you firmly for your extremely high effort submission!