Okay, so the new character designs look great, the scenes are great, the possession mini-game is definitely more challenging than the previous one and tying upgrades to character possessions instead of a skill tree does make a player think more about which characters to possess first in order for an easier run rather than immediately going for the right-hand corner character like before which was previously the best choice for first possession. The Manager level looks overall good. Thumbs up.
Now the criticism; I seriously hope that the intro cutscene to the Manager level is temporary placeholder AI art because it is a considerably significant downgrade compared to the intro art at the beginning of the game. The dialogue at times doesn't make sense in context (e.g. "So disrespected and shameless!" Using the past tense doesn't make sense here, Ghost is reacting to something he's seeing right now, it should be "disrespectful" not "disrespected".) and the red scribbles are, well, quite frankly terrible.
Also, the Manager level keeps referring to characters as "her" when I'm pretty sure the characters in question are the femboys, thus it should be "he". I did initially wonder if it was an identity thing for one of the characters (a Haruko iirc) but then one line of dialogue from the blonde hair Manager simultaneously refers to a Renji with both male and female pronouns in the same sentence, so it kinda just looks like the dialogue is contradictory.