This was a wonderful thing to play. Wonderful art style. It adds a softness and dream-like haze to the setting. I also like your timing, how he speeds past some of his words, and how you make good use of the camera to tell your story, panning up and down and having him quickly appear when you open the notebook. I also really like how the impact of the choices are clearly labeled so I know what I'm getting into.
I did notice that a lot of the sentences are missing periods at the end and there is some tense mixing but overall a really good demo Looking forward to playing more!