I think this fits retropunk, it's very 80's synth, in fact, that first keyboard sound I was expecting it to jump scare me into "having a wonderful christmas time"! But the melody departs from 80's and gives it a more future feel. I don't hear noir at all. I think it would fit a busy future cityscape, or would go well with a pacy puzzle game (e.g. shapez/beltmatic).
I don't know if the broken bass/drum pattern part quite works, maybe a little too broken for the style. But it does add some interest in wondering where the timing lies, and the drums actually come in faster than you think they would. Something about the snare bothers me with whether it gels with the other instruments - I wonder if it needed to be more drum machine-sounding, or has a little overdrive to stop it sounding so clean. Maybe in some places it could do with a little more reverb on the keyboards, give it a more floaty feel?
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Thanks for the comment.
Well the noir I guess I missed completely.
I made the drums like that on purpose, didn't want to have the regular 4/4 up down beat.
I don't really like putting much reverb on keyboards unless I'm trying to make it sound huge, this was not that kind of a track.
Overdrive on the drums would make it take up more frequencies that I want to leave to synth, so I don't have problems with phase when widening the whole mix.
Hope this explains my thoughts.
Once again thank you for taking the time to comment, always happy to hear others thoughts on my work!