Woahhh that's so cool! I think writing wise you really improved on setting the scene, especially with how MC has a lot of control over their narrative rather than it just being this detached narrator that's observing the scene so it feels a lot more intimate and shows MC's personality that compliments well with the choices. I'm so excited to see That Guy and more to the demo! More so I want to see how Cole will act further on, looking forward to how you'll shape the story and having more people see this project :DD