I am not that much into story based text games and I loose patience really quickly. I guess take my feedback with this in mind. I feel there is way too much text compared to the possible interactions in the game. I would love to be able to interact more with it.
Also having voices can add a lot to the vibe. Doesn't have to be someone reading the text just some "Simly" kind of sounds as the text is played would work great.
Love the drawings. It's really beautiful. Music is really cool.