Fun concept, I love how the entire document feels like some sort of candy-fueled fever dream.
The sensory details in every room are a great touch. Very helpful for the GM to use, I honestly wish more games did that.
I wish the text was laid out a little more cleanly to make it more readable. Not necessarily artistically laid out, but the spacing and indentation seems inconsistent and it makes it a little harder to parse.
Thanks for the feedback! I stole the sensory thing from the excellent 9 Lives to Valhalla, and try to use it in all my RPG stuff now, helps me remember what I was thinking when coming up with the stuff.
Agreed, the layout definitely needs work. I was using Google docs, and it's not the best. I plan on redoing it in a word processing app to make it more clean and consistent after I revise some things, along with doing a more artistic layout.
