Good update, it didn't feel as short as you said. The writing improved a lot so good job, it's definitely not perfect not you're getting there so keep trying to improve it more.
On a side note, stupid thought but it would be funny to add some sound effects to Jayce's more animated expression like the anime eyes can have a ""WOAHHHH"" sound effect and that gnome rainbow barfing thing can just have Sprinkle sounds ( yeah I saw it on your Twitter, and stop it with the thrist you're being too thirsty )
Anyways uwu