Okay! so this has potential. I dont enjoy MC being a pushover about contacting H+S but then we wouldn't have as much plot im sure.
Ive a few guesses as to what could be going on. I did see some incorrect words (2 completely and 1 potentially wrong tense), so I'm wondering if this was a translation piece based on the first 2.
It uses "fabric" instead of.. Factory? bring close by after receiving Ted, and that MC's thoughts "thrift" instead of drift.
The one I'm unsure of is "...a giant H+S with LED lights that was starting...". I think if the word sign was added, it'd be better. Having 3 items use "was" is a bit awkward, but maybe it is grammatically correct.
A little worried at how oblivious MC is about the slip ups and reactions about Robin. hoping for multiple endings with at least 1-2 that dont end up with robin killed 😅
did not expect delivery person to have a model so im suspicious there. wardrobe has 0 options other than default pink. maybe more to come?