This is a bit out of my depth. I had to do further research on what you've presented. It seems like the e31 result is important, and the experimental design backs it up.
Main feedback: the science-to-culture connection is your most underrated strategic insight, but the pitch makes the audience work too hard to see it. Right now, the four arms read as parallel bets rather than as a single integrated thesis. You need an explicit paragraph that makes the argument for why consciousness-as-physics needs a cultural distribution layer to land. Make the reviewer see it too. That's the move that turns perceived scope creep into a strategic advantage.