This is a strong pitch for how succinct it is. I can understand what you're trying to achieve. If it really works out it would clearly be a >>billion dollar business.
The pitch as it stands puts the algorithm itself as a bit of a black box, and the algorithm is clearly The Thing here - and to inspire more confidence I think it would be good to talk more about "how you know it does what you claim" or "why you have the expertise to make this work" or something in that area. as it stands there's very little in your pitch that a crank who wants to claim they are doing something but doesn't actually have something real couldn't also say, if you see what I mean - you need evidence to make potential investors and partners bayesian update. if you don't have strong evidence yet, "what evals were planning to run" could also work for this - a plan to get the evidence.