I like this a lot, it's very convincing as an actual song in the soundtrack with the lack of reverb. My big issue with the song is that the hi-hat (or shaker?) doesn't sound like it's in tempo, it sounds like it wants to be swing but doesn't reach it. It makes the drums sound unintentionally awkward in a way, not a total dealbreaker but it is distracting. I did like the upbeat B section where the groove changes, at this part it be nice to have a different instrument take the main melody while the sax accompanies in the background (maybe strings or an organ). With some changes this can go from great to REALLY great.