This is directed at the actual CN version and not the GPT lyricism cliche slop. With a /lit intrusive thought description like that, I decided to bite, and I came away agreeing with my friends that we ought to be (just a bit) meaner to MFAs. "Get out of the piazza and back to the typewriter." This is a Purkka thinkpiece that needs to be chased down with some grub and matcha . My intrusive thoughts aside, what the prose really succeeds at is conveying a deep romanticized longing in casual modern CN prose that I didn't know would be such a joy to read. It is extremely stylistic in this regard that dampens the borderline hostile referential habits, but I'm fine with the piece remaining a bit ambiguous towards the end. Art direction wise, I truly think the sprite doesn't need to be there. It's a rare case, but so much of the text depended on the ambiguity of the titular "you" that seeing it manifest in such anime-furry specificity feels like a betrayal. I'd be more interested in a KinGoliard Mr.Big collage subversion. I hope I didn't come across as too mean because this piece definitely deserves the attention, especially those open-book style readers or day 1 curiousmaxxing wordsmiths that the author demands to fully appreciate, and for those who don't there are little nugget phrases to chicken-head pluck out in the brilliantly written opening.
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Thanks for the comment. I would take the full responsibility instead of GPT for I did all the proofreading (thrice), and I should be responsible for quality control.
I am grateful that you do appreciate the writing style, and your criticisms as well as suggestions. They are helpful, and I did not take it the mean way. I would strive to improve upon this work.
There are some things that I could not agree with you though:
1. This work is based on real life experience, to share. Plan A (which was the original script of the third part of Plan Harahar) was the love letter I used to propose last time, and post-war trauma is a serious topic in China (and also in other war-torn places if I may so imagine). So on so forth. I personally think no such things should be kept out of publicity, regardless of how they are written.
2. I am not here to side in the long-standing misunderstanding (or probably feud) between avant-gardes and others. However, avant-garde works should not be isolated from the rest. We share the same humanly creativity, only expressed in drastically different ways.
Edit: 3. I have searched KinGoliard and decided that I don't like it. I won't consider making my future works that way. Plan Harahar is a thoroughly furry work and matching it with furry CGs would be a fit. However, I would not rule out the possibility that there is a more suitable way for furry to be present.
Also edit: 4. I am baffled by the notion that there's reference in Plan Harahar, because there is little. The only reference is from Corona by Paul Celan, because that is exactly how I felt when I handed out Plan A. You won't need any understanding about Paul Celan before reading Plan Harahar. You may notice his name on the recommendations screen, grey, but I played the screen for only 2 seconds because I didn't want any reader to follow all of them. Just turn up the tune and enjoy.
(Fun thing, I am a master's student in engineering, and Arendt the postmodern poet is a student in mathematics.)
I hand-typed this. Surely, my English has gone a little rusty over the years, but at least there's no GPT between us now.
Thank you again for reading Plan Harahar.
Ah thank you so much for the reply also!!! I appreciate the engagement with my first language and now I feel kinda bad that I didn't do the same. Regarding your two points... I agree with them??! I think there might be some serious misunderstanding in my comment (and understandable because arrrgh language! If you'd like though I could try and probably fail miserably at conveying what I mean in CN). I am well aware of the fic/non fic blurring of postmodern stuff and I truly appreciate you for being brave enough to put your honest self on stage.