I am sitting here in the dead of night, having just played a first playthrough of your demo.
So many things happened, and by the end of it, I just sat there and said " This is fantastic.", because that was all I could think to say.
But I have so much more to talk about with this demo!!
First off, The fact that something that is so long is just a demo completely bowled me over, it's wonderful, I literally stopped at one point and went 'Wow, I didn't know demos could run this long.', and I was so happy for it.
The character designs are so wonderful, Azul and Dean had me falling in love with them at first sight, and when Connor grabbed us and appeared, I actively thought 'Who the hell is this plain guy??' because Connor did exactly what I assume he was supposed to do: look average so as to offset the horrible personality and things he does. He literally looks like he could blend into a crowd and no one would be any the wiser about the things he's done.
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But focusing on the ones I adore, Azul is like a puzzle box that I want to solve, he was the one I targeted on my first playthrough of the demo.
He is obviously fiercely protective of Desmond, and he's so many other things. Sweet, kind, a bit out of touch, a bit paranoid and angry, I really can't wait to see more about him and his son, and maybe hopefully that beautiful man may fall in love with me someday with any luck <3
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I feel the same way about Dean from the small bits I've seen about him. (He'll be my next playthrough of the demo)
His beautiful nails with the cute little ladybug on them, his blue honeycomb earrings, his golden eyes, his connections to insects, I saw him offering us coffee and being so kind to us but so catty to Irene and I just imagined linking arms with him and sashaying our way to the breakroom to talk trash.
I would hold his hands and kiss them many times if he would let me.
The butterfly scene was so beautiful. I know he got very cagey with it, but it was drawn so well and with such poetic words.
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Tango, his sister Clara and his cat Sharky are so wonderful too. I'll be trying to do a third playthrough to see more about him, but even without that, you put so much detail into the things about him, the things that he wears, the things he likes, and even without seeing more of him, I already know he is super close with Clara, and I love to see that!
The fact him and Clara are friends with the MC despite them being a reclusive workaholic just goes to show how warm and friendly they are, and the small moment where he let the MC vent before going to them and helping them calm down... I honestly got a small crush on him from that, not as much as Azul and Dean, but he obviously has a soft spot in my heart already and I hope to see more of him as well.
And Clara seems to be such a sweet and nice person, we're really lucky to have her as a friend <3
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When it comes to the technical stuff, there are a few issues, nothing too big! A bit of editing for the texts (But nothing dramatic, don't worry, You did amazing!), and the inability to save during choices (Though maybe that was the plan?), but those are honestly nitpicks!
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Back to the good stuff, I really like how much we can hate Darren and Irene, the way they just look just puts you off from vibes alone!
Honestly, I'm super surprised that Irene isn't the Mistress that Darren is cheating on his wife with!
(Azul was so awesome for punching desserts into his face, love Azul <3 )
I really want to learn more about Lorenzo and Richard as well, I'm honestly slightly scared of Richard, there's just something about him and the way he had used the coupon that made Azul so upset that makes me wonder if he's going to be a big threat...
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The detail that you had put into the characters is obvious and full of love.
The details in Clara's hair clips, the fact that her and Tango have hair that match at the tops but are dyed differently at the bottom (Which I think just really symbolizes how close they are as siblings), The fact that Connor's shirt is slightly untucked, the gold and ruby clip in Lorenzo's hair along with his sliiiiightly opened up shirt and rolled up sleeves, Richard's jewelry and long hair, Dean's matching jewelry and nails with the adorable ladybug, Azul with his beautiful long hair, golden piercings and nails, and how both he and Desmond have little animal prints on their aprons, Azul with a frog and Desmond with a little crow- I could really go on and on, but just know that your hard work is noticed and appreciated!
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The world-building is completely enchanting to me and I cannot wait to find out more about it.
Who is causing us nightmares?
Who is the woman from our dreams- Our wife- and why was she in the red world in the state she was in?
Who was the man we had run into at the start?
I have so many questions, and I cannot wait to find the answers to them.
Definitely following for more, I can't wait to see what you do next!