I’m judging this as something I’d actually run at the table. This is a solid investigative scenario with a good slow escalation. The offshore platform is a strong, contained location. The connection between restoring power and increasing danger is smart and easy to manage as a referee. The reveal of an autonomous drone warfare system feels believable and unsettling without being over the top. It’s longer than I usually prefer, but it’s organized well enough to use. I could see running this with very little work. It’s a strong entry that takes the drone war theme seriously and builds tension in a practical way.
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I wrote this on almost a haunted house story foundation. Get them in, constrain them and pull them in deeper.
I think I've run something similar as introductory adventure in format. One I padded out a little.
I wish I played up the puppet angle a little more. Scattered them around for a bit of colour, flavour, someone with a mostly appreciated sense of humour making the station a bit brighter. Or perhaps used them to be the occasional scare, like Jonesy in Alien.
If it does have a weakness, it is that you need a tighter grasp of the group. You have to be able to play with them. Cut off the right discussions and let the right discussions go on to keep the tone, tension.