Your writing style is really catchy, easy-to-follow & therefore entertaining.
The story had a grip on me & I could not stop reading, even though I disliked every single character for their personality.
Your style, worldbuilding, atmosphere & characters are really advanced & work great together, so I can only critizise on a high level:
Understand that your characters can be seen as Idols. Your characters feel real & fleshed out, but all of them are very superficial & kinda lost. None of them shows self-worth. They do not adapt, learn or teach me any kind of moral.
As an author you have the power to make them teachers to the reader. Let them have clever, grown-up responses to problems. Which give the reader a good, useful philosophy for his life.
I had a ton of fun reading your story. Your technique & style feel flawless to me. Get your characters to teach the reader something & your stories will be on another level.