As a lover of Clerks, this feels very true to the source material. In the movie, Dante is so easily swept up in the antics and emotions of the wide variety of people who come into Quickstop and it's through these interactions that we slowly start to figure out just what kind of a guy he really is. One of my favorite things about the 5 Min E games is how this is the way our characters take shape too. (At least for me,) normally you don't have a concrete plan for who this person is and you find them as you write about the experiences they go through. I haven't written mine yet, but I've got a vast catalogue of dorky discussions that I've always envisioned in a Kevin Smith movie and I can't wait to get started. Awesome job!
Also I'm sure there's no need for apologies to Kev, I'm sure he'd adore this! I'd imagine his only criticism is that there aren't enough dick jokes or Batman reference, but I guess that's our job to put them in there XD