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Your layout design is cool! I really dig it. 

However, I cannot read this very well-- the contrast in general is relatively poor in my opinion and I found my eyes glazing over trying to parse it intitally. The text is also relatively small? Not accessible... please consider making a plain text version with no fancy formatting. Your visually impaired friends (like me) will thank you! 

The things on the side of the PDF (the white background with black text) seem a bit ....well, scronched! They're a little squished. You might want to choose a different font that is a bit darker or has more contrast, too. 

Otherwise, the design work is super neat. I like the punk sort of style, and white text on black IS very cool, so for those with not bad eyes, I'm sure they'll appreciate this more than me.

My first thought looking at this was 'I am not good at reading arrow' and 'this is a bit sronched.' The way things are laid out is neat; however, it makes things a little difficult to follow. I found trying to wrap my head around the flow of this mission hard for this reason. 

I really like how this has its own rules in it, and that you provided a bunch of random tables. I love a random table <3! The ASCII cat also made me really happy to see. Did you make it yourself?

This mission has the aesthetics it wants down pat, and I respect that. Making a coherent consistent theme for a piece is hard but you've done a great job. I didn't give this a 5/5 more due to the readability issues than anything else-- on its own, this rules.

Suggestions:
- please make a plain non-fancy layout version
- more contrast or just heavier font (to make it easier to read)
- the arrows confused me, so maybe try a few other layout ideas for that? you don't have to nix the arrows totally, just maybe try a different setup

Overall, this mission oozes aesthetic, and seems like a self contained piece-- I am eager to try it. (:

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Yeah, I initially was working on it in plain text, but I ended up editing a lot while doing the fancy layout, and ran out of time to get the changes back into the markdown file before the deadline. I have now, but unfortunately can't add a file until the judging  is over. I'll have to remember that next time I do a jam. It definitely got pretty scronched in there. Version 2 is gonna have more breathing room, and hopefully a more legible layout, in addition to having a plain text version.

And I did not make the cat. I got it from this site. Honestly, it might've been a mistake, since I ended up liking it, didn't want to cover it up, and that probably lead to things being even more scrunched than they had to be.

Anywho, thanks for the feedback!

P.S. I Just realized while typing this message that just because I can't add files to the itch page now, that doesn't mean I can't share plain text with you, so here's a paste of the markdown file, if you want it. The link will self-destruct in a couple weeks, after I'm able to upload the file to itch here.