Hehe I'm glad to hear you had fun with the chapter! I enjoyed reading your thoughts, thank you for sharing them 😊💛 (You'll ride the dragon soon 😼)
> I will say some of the parts in Vez's route felt a little - clipped + abrupt.
Hmm I'm not sure which parts you mean? 🤔
'(You'll ride the dragon soon 😼)' -- 😮😲🤩 BET. Will hold you to that. ;)
I can replay to find the specific one, but I couldn't remember off the top of my head beyond it being a transition from one scene to the next. *EDIT* Added (but again: this is more subjective/matter of opinion than anything 'wrong'):
to this:
I remember feeling a bit confused on what was happening when I was just in the gardens with Vez. There was no mention of (unless I missed it): Them meeting at the tower, having a plan to do so, going somewhere afterward. Was it a surprise? It felt like I missed a conversation they may have had(?).
And:
to:
This one felt abrupt to me; I was so into the moment, and I think I expected something after my MC thinking 'You're so, so lost.', (it felt dreamy and pensive and weighted) - beyond - 'The next day!' I think I thought more introspection would follow.
Others may not have felt this at all, but I do hope it helps to at least know how I read/took it!
Hmm I wrote the first one like that assuming that the reader can understand that the scene switched because everything is different. Maybe I should add a time note to the new passage like in some other places 🤔 I should use it more often. I'll look into it tomorrow. As for the second one, there's not much retrospection to have; the Oracle already had plenty (for now) by that point, so I'll leave it as it is. Thanks for showing it to me!
And that's completely fine; there's so many variations to how each reader actually - 'reads', there's no way you could 'appease' us all -- and that's not the point. As I wrote: what felt like that for me may not have for others; this was never a 'you should change this' request, just me sharing since you asked (which I do appreciate; I just hope you don't get too focused on this one bit vs. - rest of my thoughts/feels for C8). :)