Woah, I did not expect to read a novel in this jam submission, haha!
SPOILERT ALERT!!! For others that haven't played the game
The amount of decision-making vs. story feels appropriate. I enjoyed having to choose a reaction based on others' actions. The pacing seems appropriate for now, but I think story beat can work being just a little bit faster.
I did not enjoy the prologue scene because it feels like a short-cut to evoke tension that do not resolve in anything. Personally, I just hate dream scene in stories, it feels low-effort because you can just wake the person up and be done with it. Perhaps it would be better to just start the story from the morning you wake up. The weird dream can be included some time maybe after the day ends. I digress.
But overall, I enjoyed the demo and would love to see more