The main story of the game (Emma) is very good and quite believable, very well constructed, very well paced. The dialogues, the script, the way Emma discovers herself and frees herself from modesty. The game is very immersive and is perhaps the first erotic graphic novel that made me want to read all the dialogues.
That said, I took the liberty of giving you some SUGGESTIONS that can make the game even better in future updates (THERE ARE SOME SPOILERS):
1) Liliana's innocence is very unrealistic and somewhat spoils the immersion that the game brings with all the other well-set situations. I don't know how old she is, but I assume she's at least 18. What I think would be an incredible plot twist is discovering later in her story with Tyler that she was actually pretending to be innocent to seduce him or to gain some professional advantage.
2) Dude, if you think it's worth to do, change the ending of the night in Paris. When the vice president (Victor) removes the 4n4l plug, give him the option to choose 4n4l (surprising Emma and leading her to an intense 0rg4sm). I say this because the scene was perfectly orchestrated for that to happen (and Emma would find herself in intense conflict upon realizing that the best night of s3x of her life – up to that point – happened with a man she hates). And that would be the turning point for Emma to start becoming more d4ring and pr0miscu0us.
3) I don't know if it's planned, but at some point in the game, it would be incredible if Emma had the option to choose to have s3x with 2 men (without her husband present, and preferably one of the guys being Nathan - the club owner) and try DP. As well as a f0urs0m3 scene with her neighbor friends Shelly and Justin.
4) Refine Tyler's personality because he's very inconsistent at times; one minute he's jealous and controlling, and the next he bows down to Emma. Bring more depth to his personality, show the conflict in dealing with Emma's changing lib1do and his hypocrisy in getting involved with other women.
5) Make the women have less similar bodies, one with relatively small (but still s3xy) br3asts, with different n1ppl3 shapes, another with more rounded bodies, a hot chubby girl, a redhead, etc.
6) Personally, I didn't like the intrigues between the female coworkers, I found them too exaggerated. The only one I think is worth developing more is Amelia (Emma's boss). If it's possible to make a change... bro, it would be epic if Victor (vice president) told Amelia to leave after the bl0wj0b with Emma still in the room. Amelia getting up, wiping her mouth and awkwardly fixing her clothes and walking past Emma with her head down in shame. And the boss remains with his d1ck out as if nothing is wrong, even with Emma right in front of him.
7) Finally, I hope Emma's friend, (Maggie - who she talks to on the phone) visits her at some point, maybe when Emma is working at the bar. And that they both find two guys they'll have s3x with and swap p4rtners with (maybe the DP scene happens here).
Best regards!