Nice work, I like the voice of this piece, its very unique and quirky. There are some misspelled words, I think in some ways it adds to the voice but in other cases it's confusing, for example the line "how those pumkin sound!!... no" i think should be "how does pumkin sound", I was confused at first because it sounds like an abrupt change in the dialog. I like the ending with the image, I think that's a nice place to end on.