This is a great start, nice work. I like the voice in the writing, it's very immediate and puts the read in the headspace of the character. I like the drawings, I would make them larger to fill up a bit more space on the page, I think you could make them 600px or even a little more. The link on the third passage goes to a blank page. There should also be some choice involved, since it's an interactive story, the player should be able to choose different paths. Not every passage has to have a choice, but one or more passages should have choices.