Thank you for this detailed critique. Honestly, I appreciate you taking the time to analyze the timeline and logic this deeply most people don't look past the surface.
To address your points:
- Grammar & Writing: You are correct, English is not my first language. I am working on improving this, and I plan to do a little 'polishing' on the early chapters once the main story is further along.
- The Legal/Prison Realism: I admit I took significant 'creative liberties' here to set up the Revenge plot quickly. I realize a life sentence for 'toxic behavior' is unrealistic in the real US legal system; the implication was meant to be much heavier false charges, but I clearly didn't convey that well enough in the text. I’ll look at refining that backstory.
- Noelle & The 5-Year Gap: You raised a great point about their relationship feeling too distant for partners. Without spoiling too much, Noelle keeps things professional intentionally for reasons revealed later, but I agree that after 5 years, their dynamic should feel closer. I will keep this in mind for their upcoming scenes.
- Choices: The early game is very linear to set the stage, but the next update (v0.2.4) specifically introduces branching paths. You will stop being 'forced' into interactions you don't want, and your choices will matter more.
The game is still in early development, and pacing is something I am actively learning. Thanks for giving it a shot despite the rough edges.